Reviewer: Adonnen Estenniel (Signed)
03/30/11 - 03:33 pm
I liked this bit of expansion on a minor character; you seemed to do Golfimbul justice through this backstory. At times your narrative fell flat, but overall it was an interesting piece. Certainly a unique take on the prompt!
Thanks! I was mostly interested in doing the whole "unique take" thing; the phrase "follow your dreams" was begging to be lampooned just a little bit.
I wouldn't mind specific crit on where "my narrative fell flat," though. Thanks for anything you can offer.