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Reviewer: Adonnen Estenniel (Signed)
03/30/11 - 03:33 pm
Chapter 1

I liked this bit of expansion on a minor character; you seemed to do Golfimbul justice through this backstory. At times your narrative fell flat, but overall it was an interesting piece. Certainly a unique take on the prompt!



Author's Response:

Thanks!  I was mostly interested in doing the whole "unique take" thing; the phrase "follow your dreams" was begging to be lampooned just a little bit.

I wouldn't mind specific crit on where "my narrative fell flat," though.  Thanks for anything you can offer.

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