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Reviewer: Virodeil (Signed)
08/03/11 - 08:48 pm
Eru

Quite a fitting end! :) And Poor Dady, he's lamenting our blindness... :) It's quite true, though, both in the scope of this piece and real life. (I shan't go into the latter, though, here.) I was firstly bemused with the opening paragraph, but interestedly went on. And I was rewarded -- richly! It was so interesting aboard this particular ride... You presented a delightfully-new point of view on the matter; not just the person, but also the matter of it. Thank you for such an enjoyable and thought-provoking read! And thank you for the writing and posting the collection most of all. I enjoyed them all -- and this one particularly -- so much!

Rey

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Reviewer: Virodeil (Signed)
08/03/11 - 08:43 pm
Nienna

Great opening and closing line -- again! My heart clenched on the first line, and felt like bursting with joy on the last line. You packed so much tension into such a short piece! And it was such an unexpected tension too... I had never thought of the Valar disapproving the passage of the mortal Ring-bearers into Valinor, accepting it just as fact. You brought up quite a valid point here! After all, if they had done their utmost to deter even the Mariner from approaching their land without a silmaril, why would they not do so to a couple of mortals -- despite everything? It was such a delightful finding to me, and embarrassing too for myself because I had never thought of it...

Oh, nearly forgot. The paradox you slipped into the last line was delightful and quite fitting. I was a little disturbed with Nienna's title you gave here, though: "Lady of Tears." In my mind, it's as if she rejoiced in people's suffering and pain or something... Well, not quite what I was thinking, but it's hard to explain it. :bemused: And here's just a thought: How if "tears" were replaced by "sorrow"? Vaguer and yet more fitting... Dunno. As I said, it's just a thought. (The thought of someone quite hungry and tantelised by the aroma of food nearby... But I shall finish read-reviewing this collection first. :))

Rey

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Reviewer: Virodeil (Signed)
08/03/11 - 08:34 pm
Nessa

Again, an apt description of Tulkas! *celebrate* I love it! And Nessa's dance was a great opening for the piece too... It would be more beautiful if somehow she was dancing to the tune of the nature, the blend of powers between her sisters and brothers... She's a Power, after all. :) Just a thought...

I giggled madly on 'watching' the interaction between Tulkas and Nessa. So like those two!

But why did you say Sauron was "dead"? Can a spirit die and was gone? Not even Gandalf said that, in RotK... :uncertain: I'd love to know -- and understand -- your reason for this. It could be quite interesting. :)

But regardless, another piece splendidly done! :) *high-five Crackers*

Rey

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Reviewer: Virodeil (Signed)
08/03/11 - 08:28 pm
Morgoth

Hmm. Was the Halfling Frodo on Mount Doom?

The piece here was so gloomy and hopeless... Then again, it's Melkor. You did him quite well. I'd give much to know his thoughts after the Ring was thrown into the fire despite everything (if indeed it was Frodo that you were portraying)! *grin* I'd say "Poor Melkor" but indeed I would love the Ring to be destroyed, thank you very much! :)

Here you showed how tightly Sauron was bound to his former master too... It was chilling, but appropriate. After all, however Sauron thought he was free of the shadow of Melkor, he was not. Now, poor Sauron indeed -- in this case!

Rey

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Reviewer: Virodeil (Signed)
07/31/11 - 06:32 am
Manwë

Whoa, certainly full of action! You have some powerful words there; and the all-along message was quite powerful indeed. :) I like it much. The first and last lines, as usual, clinched it well. Good job! And here's certainly a very known event seen from a different point of view! :)

Rey

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Reviewer: Virodeil (Signed)
07/31/11 - 06:24 am
Mandos

Ehh... This drabble sprouted up many questions, to me. :) Firstly, why didn't you use "Námo" instead of "Mandos"? After all, you used "Irmo" instead of "Lorien" in the first drabble... Secondly, what about Eru's will and Námo's doing? :confused: I'm sorry for not catching it...

Otherwise, your thoughts on the matter were interesting, to say the least. I may not agree with all of them, but to each her own. :) I found many here, but I have forgotten them by now... Sorry. It would be a lengthy discussion if I listed them here too! :)

Well, I'd better move on, before sleep/other things defeat(s) me...

Rey

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Reviewer: Virodeil (Signed)
07/31/11 - 06:11 am
Estë

Sweet... Haha. And it's evening now here. (7:06 PM, to be exact.) So the theme fits my current mood well! The last line was particularly sweet and lulling... :)

I thought you wouldn't set aside a special drabble for the Lady of Rest, though, since she's already appeared in the first drabble. But thanks for doing this! The little vignette was quite lovely...

Hmm, I just thought of this (despite the sleepiness), by the way; just an idea: How if you put the drabbles in the order of the events? It's kind of fun trying to figure out which event is portrayed; but when you could still have the readers wondering while at once having a good order on things, why not? Well, just an idea. *shrug*

And now, on to the next drabble! :)

Rey

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Reviewer: Virodeil (Signed)
07/30/11 - 06:38 pm
Yavanna

I love the idea that Yavanna was watching the Entmoot from afar, and how you described how she listened to their voices. (The reference to Ossë's wrath was startling though! :)) Perhaps, though, instead of sending message through earth and grass and Arda itself, you could just do so right to the Ents? They were her children; they must be apt to listen to her advice... It would be like listening to the advice of a parent, without stripping them of their own free-will. This sounded like what Aulë would do, truth be told. His command is over the stuff of the earth, not what grows on it.

Something in the drabble made me a bit uneasy too: "...in the heart of her beloved Valinórean forest..." This implied to me that she loved only the Valinorean forest, not others, somehow...

I'm sorry for the complaints. You might be thinking that I wasn't enjoying the read. But I was. Your description of an action was as excellant as usual...

Now I've got to go, though. Be back in the afternoon; will be back here soon. :) Hopefully you're not offended/dejected by this... :uncertain: If so, I'm sorry...

Rey

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Reviewer: Virodeil (Signed)
07/28/11 - 07:50 am
Oromë

Poor Oromë... He's suffering from quite a similar disappointment with Aulë. (Here's to the hope those servants have hardened themselves for the worst when/if they come back! LOL) I love the last paragraph best; winced when I was reading it, in fact. Curt and brief and poignant... You seem to be the mistress of brief descriptions of high poignancy, it seems. :)

Thanks for writing -- however indirectly -- about Alatar and Pallando. They are too rarely written about, especially from the point of view of someone else. -- I hope you do get around to posting the other ficlets soon here so that I can read-review them!

Much looking foward to more,
Rey

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Reviewer: Virodeil (Signed)
07/28/11 - 07:43 am
Tulkas

Hahahahahahaha!!! -- Sorry, but I can't help it. I so -- so, so, so -- love this vignette most of all! *hug* You don't have to worry. It's the best of your ficlets in this collection so far. You did Tulkas' tone quite well, and I sniggered all throughout the read. Tulkas, indeed! And yes, it doesn't seem like he's involved directly; but you did say "opinions" in the summary, no? *grin* I so love it! (You know, I was prepared for the worst when you warned us all in the beginning... Now I'm kind of disappointed, in an odd way. Glad you were mistaken in this case, though!) I can't even say which part I love best, because I love every word of it!

Rey

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Reviewer: Virodeil (Signed)
07/28/11 - 07:36 am
Ulmo

I love the action... Again, you portrayed it quite vividly, and I felt like Ulmo -- or most specifically, like the path of water Boromir's funeral boat travelled through. Beautifully and strongly told! You managed to convey Ulmo's state of being perfectly -- something that is not easy to do, given his fondness for a state of discorporation -- and his thought on how the Three Hunters entrusted Boromir's body to him was quite poignant; touching, moving, well understood and well-imaged. I love Ulmo -- and his Maiar -- too, so this is a treasure. Thank you, Crackers. :)

Rey

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Reviewer: Virodeil (Signed)
07/28/11 - 07:30 am
Vairë

I love the last line... very fitting for the Weaver. I'm surprised you put emphasis on her foresight, though, while she's said to weave all things that has passed (or in this case, is happening). Here she felt like a blend of herself and her spouse... A rather unique point of view to feel in, certainly.

I love your description of her weaving the battle as it went. It was so vivid... I truly felt like her, watching the battle with bated breath while trying to catch up with the event with fingers that are forced to weave normally despite everything.

It's interesting too: her saying that there hadn't been "shadow and flame" since quite a long time ago. If she meant battle of Dark and Light... there were many, in all three ages. But if she meant Balrog, indeed she was right... (I wonder if she also wove how the Balrog decemated the Dwarves of Moria? Hmm... a plot-bunny...)

I also like how you incorporated such a small detail as Turgon's sword weilded by Gandalf -- clever! *grin* I was pleasantly surprised by it. In fact, it's one of my favourite parts here -- beside the last line, and her act of weaving.

Thanks for the vignette!

Rey

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Reviewer: Virodeil (Signed)
07/28/11 - 07:02 am
Vána

Powerful first line -- again! (I so love it...) It describes Vána's character very well, to me; not only in this, but as a whole, in all her existence. Compared to her older sister Yavanna, she might indeed feel inferior -- let alone all the other Valar as a team. Great word choice!

I thought something like Kingsfoil would be in Yavanna's purview instead of her younger sister, though. I thought Vána would rather concern herself with flowers and birds -- and perhaps butterflies and bees, too. I never saw descriptions of athelas attested anywhere, but I always imagine it to be a flowerless plant but with scented leaves. (Some plants are like that.) Perhaps everyone's perception about this one lady (and perhaps Nessa, too) is just different one to another. (Myself, I always think Vána as the lady of the beginning and growing things, spring; Nessa as the lively wildlife and summer; and Yavanna as everything else and encompassing all, while also the lady of autumn -- got that from Philosopher at Large, by the way (I'm just agreeing with her.)) It's quite interesting to see how Vána thought and worked, especially in this particular situation. (To say the least!)

I enjoyed the ride very, very much so far. Thank you for writing them, and also thank you again for posting them here... I'm sorry if any of my words displease or offend you -- I never mean to.

Rey

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Reviewer: Virodeil (Signed)
07/28/11 - 06:52 am
Varda

Powerful last line. :) Spot-on, too. And yeah... I admit I was confused by it, till you explained it in the end notes. (Sorry.) The thing that baffled me was this: "It escaped his lips, a last prayer, desperate and feeble." It kind of signified someone dying and far from any kind of assistance to take effect, in my mind... If you wanted to portray Frodo, you could put something that would clinch it too, IMHO -- like something of the place or the situation, without losing the intense singularity of the point of view you managed to convey marvellously here. (You missed the 'i' in "deadly king," by the way...)

I love how you portrayed Varda's noticing Frodo's plea and reached him across all those distance. Your descriptions were poignant. As I said, the intense singularity I felt here was marvellous to feel.

Thank you for putting the collection here... They are all great. :)

Rey

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Reviewer: Virodeil (Signed)
07/28/11 - 06:45 am
Aulë

Powerful first and last lines! I love them. If you'd eliminate the "why" in the end of the second-to-last paragraph, though, the last line might be more powerful... But the first line truly caught my attention and set the tone of the whole musing -- "Even you, Curumo?" -- poor Inventor, he's so disappointed!

I was confused of this part in the first paragraph, though: "and certainly strong enough than to join his service" -- What did you mean to say? The grammar is a bit awkward there... And sorry for the nitpick. (I'll try to refrain from it if you want me to. :uncertain:)

Aulë's musing was certainly interesting to follow, and you managed to convey his disappointment throughout the vignette as vividly as you did in the first line. Your interpretation of his strengths and weaknesses was certainly intriguing. Reading it, I was tickled by a question: Silm mentions that Aulë shared things of his making freely; so perhaps he just appears to do so while claiming things for himself in his own mind? A rather scary thought, but spot-on, I'd say, for all creators...

And now, on to the next drabble! :)

Rey

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Reviewer: Virodeil (Signed)
07/28/11 - 01:05 am
Lórien

So it's how Faramir -- and later Boromir -- got the dream! It was quite interesting watching the two Valar discuss about what to send... Interesting, too, that Irmo said he's out of practise. I wonder why... Then again, who did he mean? I suppose it's Faramir? Because he got the dream first. But from your drabble, it hints that Boromir's the one getting the dream...

 

Oops. Got to go. The teacher's here. See you in the next drabble!

 

Rey

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Reviewer: abbyforth (Signed)
07/26/11 - 04:12 pm
Vána

Isn't that supposed to be Yavanna?
Vana is forever young...
I commend you on writing good drabbles though, , I can never do that, as my ideas just go too out of control!

Author's Response:

Thank you much for the review and for your compliments on my drabbling skills! :) And on Vana vs. Yavanna, the Sil says that "[Vána] is the younger sister of Yavanna. All flowers spring as she passes and open if she glances upon them; and all birds sing at her coming." So I guess I just took the idea from flowers to random herbs, even though I'll admit it would probably make more sense if it was Yavanna. :) Thank you again!

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