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Reviewer: EverleighBain (Signed)
06/26/14 - 08:43 pm
Taking the Bruise

Holy smokes. This gave me shivers. I know it's not your most recent work, but Celebrian has been on my mind lately and this came up as I was perusing your stories.

Many authors have handled this particular slice of life, but this is the first I have read where the parallel between Celebrian and Felagund is drawn. The way you handled it--with Celebrian feeling as if beside his great deeds and heroic death, her own worth will diminish even more--made her helplessness and shame both personal and poignant.

And then the way Finrod responds to her when she reaches the quay--gruff and furious and absolutely without pity--somehow this gave me more hope for her healing than all the peace and gentleness Lorien undoubtedly had to offer her.

 

Masterfully and hauntingly written. I look forward to reading more of your work when I get another snatch of free time!

Blessings,

Everleigh



Author's Response:

Thank you very much! I'm so glad this story worked for you!

It probably goes without saying but Finrod doesn't see Celebrian as lesser in any way at all.

In case you are interested, there's a passage (a flashback) in chapter 3  of "Something Un-Feanorian" that sort of shows Elrond's angle  on Celebrian's situation. But I gather you don't have much reading time!

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Reviewer: Dreamflower (Signed)
09/13/13 - 08:10 pm
Taking the Bruise

Goodness, this is truly one of the best "Celebrian's leaving" stories I've seen; you capture so well her frailty of mind and body--and yet the lurking underlying strength that tries to surface in her thoughts of her uncle.

And the end was delightful.



Author's Response:

Thank you very much, Dreamflower!

I'm so glad to hear that I managed to capture some of that--and that you liked the ending!

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Reviewer: Larner (Signed)
08/26/13 - 07:49 am
Taking the Bruise

Oh, but I can so see this!  Alas that she has known such pain, such terror, and suffers as you point out from so much confusion and anguish with but odd moments of clarity.  But she will heal....  And she now is with the one indivicual who has been through it as well, and can truly understand.

Thank you so for this one!



Author's Response:

Thank you!

I'm glad my description made sense to you!

I'm convinced Finrod will be able to help her heal.

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Reviewer: Raksha The Demon (Signed)
08/05/13 - 03:07 pm
Taking the Bruise

I really like this story; it captures Celebrian's frustration as well as her pain; she is not totally helpless, she is trying her best to not only survive but choose what is best for her family as well as herself.  And I loved the ending!



Author's Response:

Thank you very much, Raksha! Happy to hear you loved the ending!

Yes, I was trying to write a Celebrian who is struggling to take control and take care of her family in the limited way she still can. I'm glad it worked!

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Reviewer: MP brennan (Signed)
04/14/13 - 10:41 am
Taking the Bruise

Thoughtful and sensitive.  Nicely done.  The last line, in particular, was excellent.



Author's Response:

Thank you very much!

I'm glad you liked that last line!

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Reviewer: Oshun (Signed)
04/14/13 - 05:50 am
Taking the Bruise

I really liked this story the first time I read it also. If anything it reads better the second time. It feels like an authentic account of Celebrian's state upon leaving M-e. I liked the description of Finrod's anger, for some reason it made me smile.



Author's Response:

Thank you, Oshun--I'm glad you still like it on the second reading!

Finrod's anger is meant to be a constructive kind of anger, a force for good rather than merely frustration. If it made you smile, I think I got it right!

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