Reviewer: tiinaj1 (Signed)
05/30/15 - 08:39 am
Hi - very interesting story. There are a few places using the incorrect word like in the 2nd paragraph: "a pile of cloths" should be "a pile of clothes". Cloth would be fabric that needs to be sewn and Clothes would be Clothes to be worn. You might want to run spell check to.
I'm looking forward to chapter 2 - this should be a good story :)